Abdulrahman Alshammari
Ssong WG
5-28-2014
My Favorite sport
I love swimming so much. It is my
favorite sport. It is very popular, because all world know this sport. It`s in
the international Olympics. You can do this sport alone and you can’t swim in
the winter because it`s so frozen. If you want to swim you need only a swimming
pool or you can go to the beach. I love this sport because my father taught me
how to swim. It is so useful to relaxing and drill. In my opinion swimming is
so useful for the body. I hope in one day to be common in Olympics.
Hi Abdulrahman! Your paragraph is good, but you have some mistakes. First one is, you should delete the comma before because. Second one is, If you want to swim you need only a swimming pool or you can go to the beach( just delete or and put comma).
ReplyDeleteHi Abdulrhman, I like what you wrote, but you have some mistakes. First, you said delete the comma before "because". Also, you have to put a comma between the fifth sentence like that "You can do this sport alone, and you can’t swim in the winter because it`s so frozen"you have to put a comma after "In my opinion".
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