Wednesday, June 4, 2014


My Grandfather



I love my grandfather because he was very great. His name was Soliman. He was a teacher for about 20 years. He retired when he left his job. My life was good and fun with my grandfather, but he died. I was sad when he died. My grandfather was an important person to me.

4 comments:

  1. Hi Entesar.
    Look at this part:he was a teacher about 20 years ago.

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  2. Hi Entesar your paragraph is very good, but you forget the negative sentence because it has some point.
    You can do that now.

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  3. Mohammed and Samar, good comments! Entesar, this is a good paragraph. But please look at the first sentence. "he was very great" This does not sound natural although it is grammatically correct. You can say "he was great" or "he was very nice to me".

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  4. "He was a teacher for about 20 years." This is a correct sentence.

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