Friday, June 13, 2014

My future dream

                                               
Mohammed Alyahya




                                                          My future dream

             I am going to get married in five years. First, I will finish the IEP program next year. Next, I am going to study Bachelor, and Master. Than I will get a big job. Than, I will not get married after,  finish college. Than I will get some many. After that, I will get married. Finaly, I will have two children.

5 comments:

  1. It is exciting that you will get married and have a good family someday in the future. Your topic sentence and concluding sentence should have the same idea. Please look at them again and make them better.

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  2. Hi Mohammad your paragraph is good but you have some mistakes.
    1- Than I will get a big job not put comma.
    2 -The sentences same meaning can you put different sentences.
    3- Than, I will not get married after, finish college ( Than, I will not get married after finish college) don't use twice comma.

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  3. Ok miss song thank you for tell me that

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  4. Hi!
    I think, you don't need a comma in - "I am going to study Bachelor, and Master".

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