Friday, June 13, 2014

My Future Dream 
       My future dream I get a good life. First, I will want a good job. Next, I will save some money. Then, I will buy big house. After that, I'am going to get married and have a family in 5 years. Then, I'am going to travel with my family. After that, I will have nice family. Then, I will not work in my country. Finally, I will get a good job but, I will not get a good job this is not my dream because I will need a good life.

4 comments:

  1. Hi meshel i think your paragraph was vary good. But i think you have a mistake when you said in first sentence ``I ( will want) a good job``. I think you can said ``I want a good job``.

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  2. I agree with Abdulrahman.
    Also, look at your last sentence.
    "Finally, I will get a good job but, I will not get a good job this is not my dream because I will need a good life."
    This is too long. You need to break it into two sentences. Also, you need to put a comma before "but", not after "but."

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  3. Thank you miss and Abdulrahman for tell me my mistake.

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  4. Hi Meshal.
    I agree with Sunyung and Abdolrahman.
    In first sentence you should say (I will get...)because our paragraph talk about future sentences.
    All in all, I hope your dream come true.

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