Wednesday, June 4, 2014

My Grandfather

     My grandfather is an important person to me because he taught me drawing by coal. His name Mubarak, and he was born in Saudi Arabia. In 1989, he had been working in a bank, but now he has an art store. He didn't like to stop drawing. My grandfather and I are very close, also I used to spend most of my time with him. He is important to me and I love him so much. 

3 comments:

  1. You have a special relationship with your grandfather! Where is the picture, by the way?
    One mistake:
    "In 1989, he had been working in a bank"
    "In 1989" is a past time indicator. You should use simple past. So change it to "In 1989 he worked at a bank".

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  2. Hi Alkaldi.

    this is a good barograph.

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  3. Hi Alkaldi
    Good paragraph,but you have some mistake in in the paragraph. "His name Mubrark". You should write like this. "His name is Mubark". And "He is important to me and I love him so much". Change it to :"He is important to me, and I loved him so much"

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