Tuesday, June 3, 2014

                                                          My grandfather
      My grand father was an important person to me because he was great. He was born in Saudi Arabia in 1933. His name is Salem. He did not have job. Hi like the desert, but he did not like the city. He died 11 years ago. He was 80 years old before died.

5 comments:

  1. Hi Eid
    I think the three sentens His name was Salem . Because the past.
    Thanks

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  2. Hi Maha
    I think both is correct

    thank you

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  3. Hi Eid!
    I agree with Maha.
    And I don't see your concluding sentence.

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  4. My grandfather




    My grand father was an important person to me because he was great. He was born in Saudi Arabia in 1933. His name is Salem. He did not have job. Hi like the desert, but he did not like the city. He died 11 years ago. He was 80 years old before died. Finally I missed him.

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  5. Eid, can you write a better concluding sentence? Your topic sentence and concluding sentence should have the same idea. Do you think "Finally I missed him" is the same as "My grandfather was an important person to me..."?

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