Thursday, June 5, 2014

My important person

                                                                My important person


         My important person to me was brother.  His name is Samy.  I liked my brother because he was help my family.  He was born in Libya. He did not work in the company,but he worked in the school before 16 years ago.  He always helped me.  For all reasons I loved my brother.



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3 comments:

  1. UnknownJune 6, 2014 at 11:50 PM

    Hi how are you Tofieg your paragraph is very good, but you have a mistake in the first sentence you said just (brother) you should write (my brother).

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  2. SunyungJune 7, 2014 at 7:35 AM

    Good paragraph, Tofieg! Please look at this part.
    "because he was help my family"
    You have a be verb and an action verb in this clause. Please choose only one verb. In this case, you need to use "helped" (a past form of "help").

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  3. UnknownJune 7, 2014 at 8:02 AM

    Hi Tofieg

    You have mistake the third sentence

    But he worked in the school before 16 year ago

    You should write like this: but he worked in the school 16 years ago (cancel before)

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