My Future Dream
My future dream I get a good life. First, I will want a good job. Next, I will save some money. Then, I will buy big house. After that, I'am going to get married and have a family in 5 years. Then, I'am going to travel with my family. After that, I will have nice family. Then, I will not work in my country. Finally, I will get a good job but, I will not get a good job this is not my dream because I will need a good life.
Hi meshel i think your paragraph was vary good. But i think you have a mistake when you said in first sentence ``I ( will want) a good job``. I think you can said ``I want a good job``.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Abdulrahman.
ReplyDeleteAlso, look at your last sentence.
"Finally, I will get a good job but, I will not get a good job this is not my dream because I will need a good life."
This is too long. You need to break it into two sentences. Also, you need to put a comma before "but", not after "but."
Thank you miss and Abdulrahman for tell me my mistake.
ReplyDeleteHi Meshal.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Sunyung and Abdolrahman.
In first sentence you should say (I will get...)because our paragraph talk about future sentences.
All in all, I hope your dream come true.