Khaled Mohammad
Sunyung SongWG 2
23 May 2014
Assignment #1
I
love visiting Dubai city for many reasons. Dubai city has many land marks to visit for
tourists. Khalif tower is the highest building in the world .
In addition there is a large international track racing that located at Yas land . I join with my friends
in racing and have Formula cars. This island containing 10
hotels such as Rotana, Ibis and Crown Plaza. It has more and very big
complexes like Emirates mall. It contains Ski Dubai. This is a very
beautiful because it has skiing and skate board. I hope everyone who visit
Dubai enjoys and feels happy.
Your paragraph is well-organized. But the sentence below does not have a verb. Please correct the mistake.
ReplyDeleteThis island containing 10 hotels such as Rotana, Ibis and Crown Plaza.
Hi Khaled! Your paragraph is good, but you should put comma after In addition.
ReplyDeleteI like your paragraph, and I will go to Dubai soon.
ReplyDeleteThink you very much Sunyung and Aymann to put notes on mistakes
ReplyDeleteThis is a lot better than the rough draft you submitted last Thursday. Did you use a translator?
ReplyDeleteI think, your paragraph is amazing.
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